My Pacific Rim Fanfic, any suggestions?
This is the first chapter, I'm somewhat new at all this FanFic writing stuff, so please forgive me, but do you have any suggestions for the plot?
"Micky, could you get your mother please?"
Let's get something straight, I go by Nikki, my dad calls me Micky. I could hear his voice crackle with fear and confusion, so I obeyed, making my way into the front yard. My mother was working in the flower garden, humming happily to herself. I expected that. It was summer, she always tends to the flowers in summer.
I let the screen door slam behind be and walked to my mom, knelt next to her, and watched her nimble finger pull weeds from the soil. She blew strands of hair out of her face and turned towards me with a bright smile.
"Hey honey, what 'ya up to?" She asked, turning back to her work, scolding a worm that squeezed through her fingers. I shrugged.
"Dunno, Dad wants you."
Mom stood up and stretched.
"Mmmkay." She turned and headed inside our house. I watched her go, then stood up. Curiosity thundered through me, I wanted to know what Dad had to say. I got up off the grass and silently went inside and listened. From where I was, I could hear Dad well enough to know something was wrong.
"A Kaiju was spotted in the Pacific."
"It's on the news."
"Is it heading this way?"
There was a grave silence. I slowly krept into the living room. Both of my parents were staring at the screen of the T.V. When Dad spotted me, he turned it off, as if trying to hide something from me. I sat on the couch, next to my mom.
My dad avoided my gave, nodding slowly.
"Micky, on those drift tests that school gives you, are you positive, or negative?" My dad's voice was dark, and there was complete silence as he waited for my answer.
He glanced at the floor, as if he were cursing under his breath. I glanced at my mom. She too was staring at the floor.
That's when it happened. The earth beneath us began to shake. We lived in California, my first thought was earthquake. My mom grabbed my sleeve and dragged me towards the front door, my Dad behind us. That's how I knew, this was no earthquake.
A shadow was cast over my neighborhood, and when I looked up, I saw a sight that caused my blood to freeze. Towering above us was a ginormous creature. It was so tall, it's head seemed like it was the size of a mailbox. My body froze and I stared up at it as it demolished the neighborhood, crushing homes beneath it's feet. All around me, people were streaming from their homes, calling for one another. In the mob, my mom lost her grip on me, and I was alone, staring up at the Kaiju.
That's when someone grabbed my wrist. I snapped from my state of awe. I whipped my head around and saw Nicco dragging me away from the thing. He cast me a smile.
"You know scatter-brain, you're not supposed to stand around waiting to get stepped on."
Nicco's comment caused me to grin.
That fadded when a giant robot landed practically right in front of my face, causing my heart to leap into my throat. Nicco's speed jumped, and he ran a little faster, dragging me by my wrist. The two of us eventually found our way to my parents. Their faces were chalky white and they greeted me with a bear hug, at least, my mom did. My dad watched the Jaeger clash against the Kaiju through narrowed eyes, as if he didn't believe what was going on. Neither did I, but I watched, fascinated. Nicco whistled as he watched.
"I studied how big they were, but they're BIG." He commented. I nodded.
Mom turned to Dad, and they whispered to one another. I strained to hear, but couldn't hear what they were saying. My dad nodded, then turned towards me and Nicco.
"We're not safe here, we need to keep going."